"Who's Don Nace?"
"He's ok, but my line work is better."
Did you go and make a Fighting Fantasy book written all in Prose Poetry?
Well its only a chunk of one and its iambic pentameter so its not exacly prose but yes
It's great. I think it could benefit from creepy background music. Then, when you get to a step where there's a scream or roar or some such, then an appropriate sound effect interrupts the score. And chase scenes have faster paced creepy music. As with URBEX or any number of other simple horror flash games. Also maybe images on select pages...